8th draft:
"How do you know so much about potholes?" Stan asked.
Did his stepfather seriously not know there were libraries filled with books? "I'll tell you a little bit," Joey said. "If you're really interested you can read more. Streets are layered, like skin, except they have gravel and asphalt and tar and dirt and concrete instead of the epidermis and dermis and blood and muscles and bones." Sometimes potholes were shallow, like scrapes, and sometimes potholes were deep gouges. "They fill up with rainwater so you can't tell if they're little or huge until it's too late. You just have to watch out for them," Joey said. "You just have to be careful."
9th draft:
"How do you know so much about potholes?" Stan asked.
Did his stepfather seriously not know there were libraries filled with books? "I'll tell you a little bit," Joey said. "If you really care you can read more. Streets are layered, like skin, except instead of the epidermis and dermis and blood and muscles and bones they have gravel and asphalt and tar and dirt and concrete. Some potholes are shallow, like scrapes, and some are deep gouges. They fill up with rainwater so you can't tell if they're small or huge until it's too late. You just have to watch out for them," Joey said. "You just have to be careful."
